introduce

hi all, my name is beny irawan, i am from indonesia. i was graduate from master degree. my major is technical engineering. i will study english language. please help me. and please correct my introduce
thanks

Hello Beny, welcome in this forum! I'd like to know more about you and Indonesia... How old are you, and what is it to live there?

Hi Irawan, my name is Real and I am ESL teacher. I will correct your introduction, as you wished:
"hi [Hi] all, my name is beny irawan [Beny Irawan], i [I ] am from indonesia [Indonesia]. i [I ] was [am] graduate [graduated - past tense] from [with a] master degree. my [My] major is technical engineering. i [I ] will study english [English] language. [,] please help me. [,] and please correct my introduce [introduction] [.]

It seems to me that you don't like the capital letter a lot, but they are required to start a sentence, after each dot, but also for names or other words (as English). Be careful also to the tense of the sentence, and to the use of the comma (,) and the final stop (.).

Here is your introduction corrected:
" Hi all, my name is Beny Irawan, I am from Indonesia. I am graduated with a Master degree, my major is Technical Engineering, and I will study English language. Please help me to practice, and please correct my introduction as well. Thanks!"

But most important, don't forget capital letters!

Hi Irawan!